Squeaky Goodness – Writer’s Quote Wednesday Writing Challenge

This is kind of a long introduction, so if you are pushed for time, and you know what the Writer’s Quote Wednesday Writing Challenge is, you can jump to the good stuff below – the quote and short story!

I mentioned on Saturday that I miss my friends, and it is the absolute truth. I try my best to keep up with posts, and check in. I particularly enjoy Colleen and Ronovan’s challenges, and wish I could take part more often. When I saw that they have an awesome new format (you should check it out), and the theme this week is Romance, it got me thinking about a scene I started earlier but couldn’t quite finish.

I’m sure you’ve heard me talk about The Collective, a serialised fiction project. I begin releasing episodes in April, and you would think, at this point, I have things nailed on. You would be right – sort of. Although the first episode is ready, and just needs checking over by my editor, I still feel there is something missing. One of the main characters, a god, who is a great deal of fun to write; sardonic, egotistical, and somewhat complex, opens the episode. At the beginning, his mood is, shall we say, dark, and though readers will discover why, I can’t help wondering if I should show a snippet of the events that led to his current mood.

So, if I may, I’d like you to be my sounding board. This is the scene I wrote as an alternative beginning to the chapter, and though the romance is dark, the love shines through (I hope), so it fits the theme (I also hope!)

First, one of my favourite quotes about love –

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Here is the scene, which I finished, and titled ‘Squeaky Goodness’ – it needs work, but let me know what you think.

Power shot across the lush, green-carpeted forest, scorching the grass. Orion was oblivious to the discharge of energy, or to the tears, which soaked into the earth and reformed the damaged ground. His Mohana was gone, cut down in her prime and why? Betrayal. The worst kind of injustice, because this betrayal came from a loved one – Mohana’s twin.

Orion could have saved her, had he reached her in time. Now he was impotent, unable to move for fear he would shatter into a thousand pieces. When Adara had struck the killing blow, the impact tore through his own heart and left it numb; a shrivelled, hollow organ he wanted to rip from his chest, if only so he could join Mohana.

They should never have been, and yet their pairing made more sense than his whole sorry existence. She made his immortal life bearable. Now he faced eternity alone. Even with all the power he possessed, Orion didn’t know if he had the strength for that. Mohana understood him. She had been his equal, and it mattered little he was a god. Not when they were together.

Mohana was born nine minutes before Adara, and as the first-born child, this made her the rightful heir to Clan Ignatius. She had been a powerful sorcerer, a gifted leader, and she had somehow found it in her to love Orion. Him, with an ego the size of a dominion, and too many flaws to count. He amused her, genuinely amused her. Mohana had laughed at his antics, told stories of his accomplishments and shown him how it truly felt to be a god. All his life Orion had been feared, envied and worshipped at one ridiculous alter after another. Until he met Mohana, he actually believed it was his duty to put on a show. To become the pompous jerk his followers expected, those who knew of his existence. Mohana’s strength of spirit, her goodness, humbled him and, without her, his world had no meaning.

Orion felt it building in his chest; the bitterness, the self-hatred, and he did nothing to stop it. He was weak. He hadn’t even had the courage to say his final goodbyes, to look upon her face one last time and let her go. No, he had left the veil that covered her body in place, turned away from the water and walked away. He had fallen as the first arrow whizzed through the air, knowing the archer’s aim would be true and he could not watch Mohana burn. All the atrocities he had seen, the wars he had fought – he did not have it in him to witness his love go up in flames.

Orion had no idea how long he lay sprawled in the grass, masked from sight because Adara had tried to keep the ceremony from him. In another life, he would have made her pay for the insult, she deserved to feel his wrath, and she would. Just not today. Not today.

When his tears dried up, Orion became aware of the heat he was channelling. His energy was still leaking out, poisoning the earth, and killing everything around him. He couldn’t stop it. It had built too quickly, accelerated by his turbulent thoughts.

“Forgive me,” he whispered to the ground. Orion knew, immortal or not, he could not survive the impact if his power reached critical and he lost control.

“Orion. No!”

A heavy weight landed on top of him, and a familiar energy closed in tight. Lucas pushed his arms beneath Orion and the ground, attempting to contain the anger, and grief, and despair. The angel was powerful, but he was not powerful enough.

“Work with me, you son of a bitch. Pull it back. Do it now.” Lucas’ voice came out clipped. He was fighting against the pain of their connection.

“Try…ing.” Orion clenched his teeth. “Get off me.” The energy burned him, but he held tight to it, even as the angel ignored his demand and held tight to him. That was friendship for you, and Lucas seemed about ready to follow him into the abyss. Orion suspected, should Lucas have an actual halo, the thing would shine with squeaky goodness.

He could feel the Guardian’s love bearing down on him, and though he wanted to deny the reminder he was still alive, instead he embraced it. He would be no kind of god if he allowed his friend to perish. Mohana would never forgive such weakness, and besides, he kind of loved the angel too.

As Orion sucked back the power, he felt a final tear roll down his cheek and drop to the ground. Mohana had loved the earth, she would not wish for him to harm her forest. He could give her that. If he couldn’t say goodbye, he could mend what he had broken.

His last thought, as he concentrated on Lucas and the arms clamped tight around him, was that it would be a lonely eternity without her.


 

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Mel

 

Writer’s Quote Wednesday: Dickens and Hope

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It’s been a while since I took part in Writer’s Quote Wednesday. This month, to celebrate the festive season, the focus is on Christmas and other religious festivals which occur during December. Over at Silver Threading it’s a Hanukah theme.

My quotes this week relate to the spirit of Christmas, rather than the tradition itself. I love this time of year, because it’s all about a sense of community, of sharing and spreading joy.

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Mel

 

 

 

 

Trick or Treat: Ronovan Writes Weekly Haiku Prompt Challenge 67

haiku-challenge-imageThis week, the prompt words for Ronovan Writes Weekly Haiku Poetry Challenge are CHEER and CALL.

If you’ve never tried out a haiku before, and you’d like to learn more, click here to read Ronovan’s article on how to write a haiku poem in English form.

In respect of the month, my haiku this week relates to Halloween. It was the first thing that popped into my head, so I went with it! Enjoy 🙂

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As a bonus, it was my intention to join in the fun last week too and, although I wrote a haiku, I didn’t get around to posting it – so here it is (prompt words pine and grief):

Mother Nature grieves
when all around her seems lost
she pines for the earth

Thanks for stopping by.

Mel

Raging Storm: Ronovan Writes Weekly Haiku Prompt Challenge #64

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This week, the prompt words for Ronovan Writes Weekly Haiku Poetry Challenge are TIDE and FLESH.

If you’ve never tried out a haiku before, and you’d like to learn more, click here to read Ronovan’s article on how to write a haiku poem in English form.

This week I’m back to relating the poem to my current WIP. Sometimes I just can’t help myself. It’s a crime novel, but it’s also a romance. I saved you from the first one I wrote! But here’s the second – enjoy 🙂

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Mel

Solitary: Ronovan Writes Weekly Haiku Prompt Challenge #63

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This week, the prompt words for Ronovan Writes Weekly Haiku Poetry Challenge are STAG and NOISE.

The example provided by Ronovan:

IT’S ALMOST THAT TIME

WHEN DEER RUN FROM THE FOREST,

THEY BRING NOISE FROM BRAKES.

If you’ve never tried out a haiku before, and you’d like to learn more, click here to read Ronovan’s article on how to write a haiku poem in English form.

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Mel

Helios’ Power: Ronovan Writes Weekly Haiku Prompt Challenge #62

haiku-challenge-imageThis week, the prompt words for Ronovan Writes Weekly Haiku Poetry Challenge are START and HOT.

The example provided by Ronovan:

THE SEASONS CHANGE HERE,

FROM HOT TO COLD THE AIR CHILLS,

AND THE BIRDS START SOUTH.

If you’ve never tried out a haiku before, and you’d like to learn more, click here to read Ronovan’s article on how to write a haiku poem in English form.

Here is my contribution. I hope you enjoy.

start and hot

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Mel

Brothers In Arms: Ronovan Writes Weekly Haiku Prompt Challenge #60

bridging-life1This week, the prompt words for Ronovan Writes Weekly Haiku Poetry Challenge are BRIDGE and MOVE.

The example provided by Ronovan:

SEASONS ARE TO BRIDGE

LIFE FROM BEGINNING TO END,

WILL CHANGE YOUR FUTURE.

If you’ve never tried out a haiku before, and you’d like to learn more, click here to read Ronovan’s article on how to write a haiku poem in English form.

I often use my current work in progress as inspiration for the haikus, and a little poetic license! I’ve got a lot to learn yet about this form of poetry, but I enjoy both the challenge and the practice. My current WIP is about men and women who served together – one in particular who had quite a journey to recovery.

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Mel

Wings of love: Ronovan Writes Weekly Haiku Prompt Challenge #59

ronovan_writes_haiku_prompt_badge_autumn_2014I haven’t participated for a few weeks but, after reading my friend Colleen’s post, I felt inspired to take part. Colleen lost her sister eighteen years ago, and wrote a poem entitled Kathy’s Cardinal. It’s beautiful. You should definitely check it out.

This week, the prompt words for Ronovan Writes Weekly Haiku Poetry Challenge are RED and BIRD.

The example provided by Ronovan:

AS THE SUN BURNS RED,

HEARTS RISE FROM THEIR MISERY,

LIKE LOVE ON BIRD WINGS.

If you’ve never tried out a haiku before, and you’d like to learn more, click here to read Ronovan’s article on how to write a haiku poem in English form.

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Mel

Connection: Ronovan Writes Weekly Haiku Prompt Challenge #55

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This week, the prompt words for Ronovan Writes Weekly Haiku Poetry Challenge are FIVE and THRIVE.

The example provided by Ronovan:

Breathe to be alive,

while you exercise to thrive;

exhausted, take five.

If you’ve never tried out a haiku before, and you’d like to learn more, click here to read Ronovan’s article on how to write a haiku poem in English form.

I decided to go with a Tanka, as the haiku I wrote felt incomplete, and chose today to post, because it relates to a character from The Fallen, and it’s release day! I hope you enjoy 🙂

darkness thrivedThanks to Ronovan for providing the opportunity.

Mel


My friend Colleen, over at Silver Threading kindly hosted me today. I just wanted the opportunity to say thanks to Colleen for her support. I really enjoyed writing the origin story.

Let go of Anger: Ronovan Writes Weekly Haiku Prompt Challenge #53

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This week, the prompt words for Ronovan Writes Weekly Haiku Poetry Challenge are MAD and GUIDE.

The example provided by Ronovan:

This mad world’s without,

a light shining in darkness,

to guide me in need.

If you’ve never tried out a haiku before, and you’d like to learn more, click here to read Ronovan’s article on how to write a haiku poem in English form.

Here is my contribution this week:

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Thank you for reading and thanks, as always, to Ronovan for providing us with this great opportunity to practice and learn.

Mel