I make no secret of the fact I struggle with poetry. It might be because I love it so much and, unlike my prose, I have a tendency to overthink it. I used to practice a little, but I haven’t in a while, so I decided to take part in Ronovan’s Haiku Challenge this week.
Here are the prompt words, and Ronovan’s example:
The Prompt Words
Think & Fresh
Your eyes beamed because
You knew what I was thinking ,
So you called me fresh.
The following is how the sentences should read.
Your eyes beamed because you knew what I was thinking.
You knew what I was thinking, so you called me fresh.
There’s also a handy link on how to write the English Haiku here.
Perhaps I’m too easily influenced, but when I read Ronovan’s example, my own thoughts went in one direction! Strangely, it’s probably the best of the bunch!
You know what I think
When I see you in that robe
My thoughts are shameless
Then I came up with something a little more subtle, and perhaps broke a few haiku rules!
Can I share my thoughts?
Can I share how I feel?
Or is that too brash?
Perhaps this one, though it feels like I’m trying too hard…
Oh, these tangled thoughts;
They torment with their vigour
And outrageous hue
Then I turned in a different direction, and decided it was time to stop!
They coalesque in my mind,
Thanks for allowing me to experiment on you! And to Ronovan for the challenge.
Until next time.
22 responses to “Practice Session: Ronovan Writes Weekly Haiku Prompt Challenge #46”
That was interesting–deconstructing a haiku. Almost–but not quite–makes me want to write one!
Thanks, Jacqui 😀 I say go for it!
Loved everyone of them. Humor, tongue in cheek, shamelessness. You got it all. Excellent. So glad you joined in. 🙂
Thank you. I’m thrilled you enjoyed them 😀 You inspired me and I thoroughly enjoyed the challenge, so thanks again.
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Had to Reblog this one. You’ll see why when you read all FOUR of author Melissa’s Haiku.
I did get a little carried away, didn’t I! Thanks so much for the reblog. I’m glad you enjoyed them 😀
OMG, Mel! These are wonderful! You have been holding out on us!!!! ❤
Thank you 😀 I do enjoy to try, but I avoid writing poetry wherever possible! I like to read instead. It was really nice to take part in the challenge though, and I’m really pleased you enjoyed them ❤
Haiku is addictive … right? Love them. 🙂
Thank you 🙂 And you’re absolutely right. I couldn’t stop once I started…I had to force myself to leave it be! I loved it though, because I haven’t played around with poetry in a while. Ronovan’s challenge is great 😀
Yea, I love the challenge. 🙂
All of them great, glad you’ve joined the challenge, I agree with Serins, it’s addictive!
Thanks so much 🙂 I’m really glad I joined in too.
I’ve never written haiku, but this makes me want to give them a try … very genuine and playful 🙂 I quite enjoyed reading them!
Thank you 🙂 I would encourage you to give it a try, but I found them a lot of fun. I’m not going to say easy, but enjoyable nonetheless!
Well, enjoyable is really why I like to fiddle around with words and I’ve been looking for something new, so I think I’ll give it a go!
Excellent! I’ll look forward to seeing what you create for us 😀
Hi Mel! Loved the 1st one best––very sexy! It was fun reading all of them though. 😀
Thank you. I’m glad you enjoyed them. I had fun, and the first one was fun to write – it tickled me! 😀
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Not certain what happened in my review last week and not putting the actual Haiku in there. Apologies. The only thing I can think of is I must have gotten tired and when I came back went to the next person in the comments. I have updated the review so your Haiku and your Amazon page are included.
I didn’t notice, so my apologies or I would have mentioned it. I just read your wonderful introduction and never gave it a thought that there was no link! Thanks so much; for the welcome and the support you give 😀