Focusing my energies – WIPpet Wednesday/ROW80

I usually start with my WIPpet, but it relates to my ROW80 update, so I’ll begin by saying my goals have taken a back seat this week, or should I say, all but my writing goals. I dedicated the time to working on my NaNo novel and things are progressing at a steady pace. I’m still behind, but that’s okay.

So, on to WIPpet. The maths is easy this week – 19 paragraphs for the date. I wrote the scene this morning, so it’s still a little rough around the edges, but I wanted to share it with you. Enjoy!

As he walked the path to Lilly-May’s door, Tyler was consumed with memories. A week had passed since he’d lost his mind and kissed her, but it could have been moments ago. The feel of her soft mouth on his, the surprised little sound in her throat, her small, capable hands on his arms. She hadn’t been appalled by his behaviour, she had been intrigued by it.

His feet paused before the first step, finding a stubborn will of their own to prevent him from moving forward. He knew why – Lilly-May was a beautiful, sensual creature, driven by curiosity, and when it burned away, he would be a pile of ash.

The same fierce determination he used to confront a fire spread through his system. He could do this. Then she opened the door and he could barely breathe, let alone move.

She’d left her hair down, so it caressed the edge of her slender shoulders. The golden hue of her skin was untouched, making him want to groan. She wore a deep blue strapless dress, which clung to her generous curves and stopped just below the knee. And, sweet Jesus, he was in so much trouble.

“Thank you,” she breathed, her green eyes sparkling. “Though, if you keep looking at me like that, we may not make it to dinner.”

Tyler grinned, he couldn’t help it. He wasn’t even embarrassed she’d seen his reaction to her, he was tired of hiding it. Tired of hiding himself. “How about we skip to dessert?” He was shocked as soon as the words left his mouth.

Lilly-May, on the other hand, laughed in delight. “You’ve been keeping secrets from me,” she said, closing the door and turning the key.


Her shoulders lifted in a careless shrug, pulling his eyes away from her face. He wanted to sink his teeth into that soft flesh. So much trouble.

“I always knew you were charming, but I’ve never seen the affects of that first hand.”

“That’s because, where you’re concerned, I’m usually trying not to trip over my own tongue.” What the hell is wrong with me?

Her eyes widened in shock, a moment before she smiled. “Who are you, and what have you done with Tyler?”

He groaned at the reminder. She only saw him as the quietly serious and loyal member of their group. A family she’d claimed as her own. There was no going back from this, because he wouldn’t pretend anymore. “Promise me something, Lilly,” he said, needing them to be clear on this one thing. “Promise me, whatever happens, this won’t come between us.”

She searched his face for a moment, all traces of humour gone. “I promise. Whatever happens, you’ll always be my friend.”

It should have discouraged him, yet he was oddly soothed by the term. His heart might be in tatters by the end of this, but he wouldn’t lost her completely. Enough with the drama, Ty.

“In that case,” he said, moving up a step so they were nice and close. “Good evening, Lilly.”

Before she could reply he bent his head, and did what he’d wanted to do since the moment she stepped out of the house. Pushing aside her hair, he placed his lips against her shoulder and kissed the smooth skin.

Her sharp intake of breath had arousal beating in his blood, so he stole the sound with his mouth. She came alive, her arms locking around his neck as she tried to get closer.

It was a wild thing, the fire building between them. Every thought in his head snapped out, until there was only Lilly-May.

Thanks, as always, to K.L. Schwengel for providing us with an outlet to share our works in progress. I’m on my way to visit the rest of the gang!

I hope you’re having a good week.

Thanks for stopping by.


48 thoughts on “Focusing my energies – WIPpet Wednesday/ROW80

  1. shanjeniah says:

    Whew! What a wild ride! I’m not sure who these two are, but I really, REALLY like their dynamic. All that heat, but there’s something much more enduring. Maybe Tyler should remember that the phoenix rises out of the ashes…. =D

    1. mbarkersimpson says:

      Oh, I like that (phoenix) 🙂 and it fits! I’m glad you like their dynamic – they are really sweet! It’s a contemporary romance I’ve been meaning to write for a while, in between my series – NaNo gave me the chance! I love Ty – he’s a firefighter and it is a pleasure to spend time with him! I appreciate the feedback, thanks, Shan 🙂

  2. kathils says:

    Zow!! Between you and Shan this morning, I’ve forgotten it’s cold outside. Jeepers. I love how you flick between what he says and what he’s thinking. It’s very natural, and shows us so much of his character. When he kisses her shoulder…*le sigh*

    So I’m supposed to focus on work now, right?

    1. mbarkersimpson says:

      lol – I know the feeling; after reading scenes with T’pol and Trip I need to take a cold shower – or maybe – if I were where you are – step outside for a while! I’m glad you like Tyler, and yes, his little move surprised me too – I like that he does that 😉

    1. mbarkersimpson says:

      Thank you, Callum, that’s quite a compliment. Now I’m feeling really good about my morning! I was supposed to be waving my arms about for a few hours, but the job got cancelled and so I’ve been in my element. I’m glad I decided to do NaNo, because Tyler has been waiting for a long time and he’s extremely talkative!

    1. mbarkersimpson says:

      Thanks, Gayle 🙂 That’s such wonderful feedback. I’ve really enjoyed spending time with the pair, and at the moment they are making things easy for me! I’m so glad you enjoyed it.

  3. Denise D. Young says:

    Great WIPpet. I’m definitely rooting for this couple to make it and find their happily ever after. There’s a sizzle of sexual tension mixed with Tyler’s inner turmoil, and that makes for an enjoyable read.

    Happy writing, Melissa!

    1. mbarkersimpson says:

      Thanks, Denise 🙂 I’m rooting for them too. Tyler is one of my favourite characters (the uniform doesn’t hurt!) and I really want things to work out for him. I appreciate the feedback. Happy writing to you too 🙂

  4. Fallon says:

    *fans self* And here, I’ve been standing in front of the pellet stove to warm up & I should have just been reading this week’s WiPPets 😀

    And I’ve gotta say, I love a firefighter 😉

  5. S. R. Carrillo says:

    That… was a seriously awesome scene. Especially “The feel of her soft mouth on his, the surprised little sound in her throat, her small, capable hands on his arms. She hadn’t been appalled by his behaviour, she had been intrigued by it.” The dynamic that that passage presents is not a common one, and I WANT MORE.


  6. Amy says:

    I might be just a little in love with both of them already. What a great, steamy scene. I assume he must be a firefighter, correct? I love the way that’s woven into the flow of the narrative. It feels really natural and gives a great sense of who he is.

    1. mbarkersimpson says:

      I’m glad you liked that…I wasn’t too sure, but yes, Tyler is a firefighter and besides Lilly, fire is his one true obsession – he’s determined to earn ‘her’ respect! Thanks, for the feedback. I appreciate it – I might be a little in love with them too 😉

  7. mrschmoe says:

    I’m super late. I managed to squeeze in a check-in. I’m getting old. Anyways, the scene is good. words woven together. I like it.
    Now I am thinking of going back to my other WIP the dark haired chick and some dude after NaNoWriMo.

    1. mbarkersimpson says:

      lol – age is relative 😉 For once I was early this week! Though normally I run a little late too. I’ll be by to check out your update later this evening. Thanks for the feedback and for stopping by 🙂

      1. mrschmoe says:

        Indeed it is. I think i have caught the bug for writing deadly female characters 😉 smiles a devilish grin, all the way to my ears.
        passes you some coffee that has an atomic punch.

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